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Guys, this journal is OLD. Please stop posting on it, as I won't reply.

Ok, I've been seeing really crappy OC's (original characters) floating around the place lately. I thought that I could help you guys out here.

-What is a original character? It's a fan-made character someone usually makes for a book, show, game, etc that is used as a means to "interact" with the main characters of a book, show, game, etc. Unfortunately, some people get this wrong and their character/self-insert may become a Mary/Gary Sue.

-What is a Mary/Gary Sue? Well....they have the following traits:

-The plot of the book, show, game, etc goes THEIR way (If this only briefly mentions a canon character and is more oc-centric, it's usually ok)
-They have NO weaknesses
-Any and all characters are attracted to them
-They have a TRAGIC past
-They are a long lost relative or are the long lost lover/girlfriend/boyfriend to a character or more
-They die a TRAGIC death
-Every good guy and bad guy likes or loves them
-Immortal, can bring people back from the dead
-Is a vampire/werewolf/fairy/princess/dragon/prince/god/goddess/zombie/unicorn, etc OR all the above!
-Often have a very over-used name
-The canon characters are ooc (out of character)
-This list is too painful to write more, but I'm sure you get the idea.

-Creating your character, Starting traits-

What is their name and/or nickname? If you name your character something like Sakura...go back to the name board! Also, do NOT match names with personalities!

Their age? Try not to make them YOUR age and birth date!

Height and Weight? If you don't describe these, often people will assume this is a self insert of YOU and may assume that you are VERY fat. So make this believable.

Species? Don't hybridize your favorite characters. Otherwise, they'll just end up a BLOB with eyes over here, a mouth over there, and twitching, useless limbs.

Hair color? PLEASE refrain from using a fake hair color (unnatural) or from making it the same hair color as your character's crush.

Eye color? Again, do NOT make it unnatural (like red)! ONLY make it unnatural if it's in a fantasy world. If it's oh...a world of cats, colors like yellow, gray, and (rarely) whitish are ok.

Clothing style? People won't take you seriously if you have them in ALL black or if they barely wear anything. If this is a animal (not a humanoid animal, but a ANIMAL animal), state if they're wearing something like a collar (avoid spiked/studded/chained collars).

Place they're living at? People won't take you seriously if you have your character in a place you want to live in. Like Japan.

Back story? Don't make it tragic unless it makes sense and doesn't go overboard. Also, if they have had any interaction with a canon character...Don't make them past lovers or some other junk like that!

Personality? Avoid matching this with names. Seriously.

Powers? Under NO circumstances should you make them immortal, have unmatched powers, ultimate healing skills, etc.. Make it a skill that they've been working with. Like uh....the ability to balance plates on a stick.

Weaknesses? This is very important!

Historic significants? If your character is something like a country representative or a solider, please do your research!

Remember, you should not make them look like a canon character! That's like dying Sonic green and calling it your OC!
OC examples- This will show you good and bad examples of OCs.

Good example-
Name: Anna Herring
Nickname: Ms. Fish
Age: 24
Height/Weight: 5'3"/230 lbs
Species: Human
Hair color/eye color: Auburn/Hazel
Clothing style: Casual and modest
Current residence: Houston, Texas
Back story: Grew up in a small town and went to collage. Her family lives in Austin. She has three siblings: two brothers, and a sister (Names are: Fred, James, and Sarah). Anna works at a veterinary clinic.
Personality: Very curious and bold
Powers: n/a
Weaknesses: She has a really bad cavity and has bad year-round allergies to the pollen.
Historical significants: n/a

Bad example-
Name: Katsumi (Victorious beauty) Yuzuki (Gentle moon)
Nickname: Sexy goddess
Age: (1,5)32,783,278,937,284 (if it's a "immortal" age and has anything from 1,1 to 1,'re basically hiding YOUR age)
Height/Weight: 6'2"/ 90 lbs
Species: Human with hints of elf, vampire, and dragon.
Hair color/eye color: Pink/Yellow
Clothing style: Sexy and cute clothes
Current residence: Japan, baby! Yeah!
Back story: All her parents DIED! She's BFF's with Naruto, Ichigo, and Sonic. Her boyfriend is Megatron. She's married to Gary Oak! It's ok though because everyone likes her and even fights for her LOVE!
Personality: Cute, innocent, flirty
Powers: She's immortal. She's got like the ability to speak to animals! She can run really fast and fly. Oh yeah! She can breath fire and if someone dies, she can bring them back!
Weaknesses: What weaknesses?
Historical significants: She's the reason (insert war here) started but she stopped it ALL by herself!

There you go. I hope this guide has helped!
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madeforefire Featured By Owner 6 days ago  Student Artist
I live in texas Willis point!!! :D
zoe-ducky Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks so much
ChaoLoo Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
What about avoiding making anti-sues? I always seem to make my OCs too boring
homestuck-trashoo Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Artist
Name: Kasai Shibo

Fandom: A Manga a friend is working on where all of our OCS live next to satan's son in college.

Age: 19 (the ocs are starting college)

Height: 5'5

Weight: 125 LBS

Species: human, but she has one of those headbands with cat ears on them.

Hair color: dark red

Eyes: brown, with a light black ring around the iris and little green specks (admin note: my eyes are like this)

Clothing style: Fandom tees, band tees, rubber bracelets, ripped jeans, 3D glasses ect...

Current residence: Tokyo, note that she is planning a career in graphic design and is here on a SCHOLARSHIP ALONG WITH HER FRIENDS

Backstory: grew up in Kansas.. Is the youngest daughter and lives in the shadow of her genius brother. Her relationship with her mom is bumpy. Dad left at 12, but visited often. She was bullied at school, but not too much. She has friends who were freshmen when she was in 6th grade, and got along with them well. She always wanted to go into graphic design and her friends has the same career path. Conveniently, they all were accepted to a school in tokyo that specializes in their career.

Powers: Rumored to have praciced Pyrokinesis, as she is very spiritual and is crafy at witchcraft. But mainly she is a nifty hacker.

Personality: introverted, all her friends came to her, short tempered. That aside, she is loyal and harddriven. Won't give up easily.

Weaknesses: her mental state is not that good. She has a naturally low body tempature so she is more prone to hypothermia. she does not trust easily and it took her friends 6 years to gain it.
CronasCorNer1 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2015  New Deviant
thank you this really helps!!!
zenkai97 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2015
Could you tell me if this oc character is good? I know that I may break some rules here, but I'm doing my best to not make my character a Mary sue.

Also, this character is not part of a fandom and does not represents me. Just a cartoon character that I made up and she is a main character. As I said before, I'm avoiding making her a Mary Sue.

Name: Akari Hikari (Her name does not match her personality and its meant to be a pun)

Nickname: White Devil

Age: 16

Height/Weight: 5'5/140 lb (Not sure if that's an average weight, but I weigh less than that.)

Species: Angel

Hair color/eye color: Blond, blue eyes

Clothing style: Usually shirts or pants

Current residence: Santa Ana, California

Back story: Nobody knows her past nor she would tell anyone. She is just an angel who works in heaven.

Personality: Annoying, sarcastic, sadistic, caring, responsible and immature

Powers: Sprout guns out of her feathers and flight

Weaknesses: Akari can be so arrogant to the point where the enemy has an upper hand. An example of this is when she keep sprouting puns and jokes.

The fact that she depends on her wings for combat is kind of a weakness since if it were to be ripped off, Akari will be useless.

Her fear of cute things make her not think rationally and would end up hurting something that she shouldn't be attacking.

Her boss. Akari knows that she should never ever mess with her boss which is why her boss is her weakness. At least her boss is forgiving. I dare you to guess who it is.

Historical significance: n/a

Hope you like this and here's a picture of her:…
For me, she's one great OC. Even if I don't know what fandom she's from.
zenkai97 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2015
Thanks for the complement. Though this character is not part of any fandom and I just made her up.
Still, I think she's a great OC. :)
zenkai97 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2015
o0LegendTheDragon0o Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
well my character is a raven
raven is overused but i love it
Lillim-darkstar Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
name: Rebecca
nick name: beca or re
age: 15
sexual: trans gender who likes males but never wanted the surgery  
species: unicorn
hair: black
eye: cyan
clothing style: jeans t-shirt anything comfortable 
current resident: on the outskirts of Houston Texas USA
back story: beca never really fit in with the other girls her age she has a little step sister she’s from a “mixed” family she LOVES animals and 
personally: artsy antisocial ( but you could never tell it online ) 
powers: she’s very good at see’ing how people are feeling but other than that none
weakness : she has bad social anxiety 

(( he coat is brown ))
melovedogs123 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
With MLP OCs, I guess unicorns are OK.
Otakunerdbeast Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Umm...Is it that bad for an OC to have a tragic past? (No hate, I'm just wondering.)
RemixedMeme Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015
For me it personally depends. Most people you give their oc a tragic past give a disservice to people in real life who have had this happen. It supposed to make their character more sad I guess, which is cool somehow. Some people have give their Ocs tragic past for the sake of having a tragic past. It's quite unoriginal which counters what Ocs are actually "original characters". This is but only my opinion many others may agree and disagree with what I say.
NekoMinecrafter Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
What about this; I made a character named Alex, her tragic past actually changes her character personality significantly. Its supposed to be a dark story, and she ends up as very, sarcastic, inconsiderate, and distrustful person in the end due to it. She is the main character of the story she is in, so she has some likable traits to her, but her backstory actually changes the character. She might have actually ended up as a nice person if she hadnt dealt with her tragic past. I feel like though, I might want to change it, but I wouldnt know how?
RemixedMeme Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2015
well personally I think giving some positive traits on your negative character would make it more appealing. But it's okay to have more negative traits than positive, but don't drown out the positives with the negatives. it's just about the character you have. you can make it however you want it's your character, but these are suggestion that you could use if you wanted.
NekoMinecrafter Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
She Definitely has some likable traits, but im gonna lessen the drama on the backstory.
RemixedMeme Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2015
k go for it
Strexcorpinc Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2015
I'm half Japanese, so when people either claim to 'know' Japanese (Ex: Konnichiwa, sayonara, kistune) or say that THEY'D LOOOOVVVVE to live in Japan, it gets on my nerves a lot. But how does this sound:

Name: Copper
Nickname: Cop
Age: 3 years old
Height and weight: 3 feet (at the shoulder) and weight is 80 pounds
Species: Wolf; Gray wolf, Northern American specimen
Fur color: Reddish gray, with hints of white
Clothing style: ...? 
Backstory: Born in Yellowstone, her pack, the Druids, was pushed out of Lamar Valley (actually happened) and assisted the pack in winning back the land. 
Personality: Clever, can be rude when POed.
Powers: She's a wolf. 
Weaknesses: Well, when her nerves get damaged she feels pain... but she can drive happy people away, she really isn't a happy person.
Fact: When she was a pup, she got bitten by a rattlesnake, but healed. 
Historical signifigance: Nothing really. 
Fandom: Real life oc?
Dewshower Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist General Artist
I actually live in Japan as an american, it isn't really too special. Fun, but not OMG AMAZINGXOXOXO
Aquamarique Featured By Owner Edited Jun 18, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
Name: Translucy
Nickname: Transparent ghost or Lucy
Age: 14 and a 1/2
Height/weight: Average pony height/ 128lbs
Breed: Pegasus
Current Residence: Cloudsdale
Species: Ghost Pony
Hair color/eye color: Blue/green
Clothing style: Whatever's comfy, or none at all.(She is a pony, she doesn't wear clothes a lot XD)
Backstory: She was born on clouds and was given the power to fly, she is a pegasus and likes to make friends, and is the only child.
Personality: Boring, intellegent, and likes to sleep.
Powers: Regular pegasus powers
Weakness: Weaknesses of a human, lava, fire, drowning, and holding her breath.
Fact: Even if she is a ghost, she can't walk through things.
Historical significants: n/a
Fandom: MLP: FiM

I made her name translucy because she is a ghost and is translucent, but cannot walk through things.
So, is she a mary sue? She's a pony btw, so I think it's normal for a pony to have these unnatural things.
cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
What if you, like me, are making a Tim burton oc?
cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
if it's okay here's my character:
Name: Amber Booth
Nickname: none
Age: this is Corpse Bride, so she died at 24, born in 1991(Sagitarrius I can't spell it)
Height: the same as any tim burton female
Weight: see above
Species: Human (now a corpse)
Hair/Eyes: Blue(was brown. Again, Corpse Bride)/Black
Clothing style:Torn tan dress
Current Residence: Downstairs
Backstory:She's Emily's older sister by 5 years. They came from a rich family. She fell in love with a guy she met as a kid. So did he. One night, as the two were getting married, she was poisoned, and sent to Downstairs. Now, years have passed and she doesn't recognize the killer (aka Barkis), and he doesn't really care.
Personality:She's funny, occasionally flirty, but she can't pay attention for very long.
powers: does being undead count?
Weaknesses: see backstory
Historical significance: none
ObsessiCat Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2015
*nosey nosey* Just my two cents, She sounds almost exactly like the main character of the canon, this is a sign of a sue :/ Try to re create her backstory also making her a relative of a canon character is usually ill received. 
cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
I'm sorry. I tried my best not to make her a Mary Sue character. And this came from my mind, so shut up.
ObsessiCat Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2015
Im sorry i didnt mean to be rude I was trying to help. My opinion stands, but by offering it I assure you I meant no disrespect.
cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
Okay, thanks for clarifying. But you still shouldn't go around telling people that the characters they've been planning for quite a while a Mary/Gary Sues. *hint hint*
ObsessiCat Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2015
People shouldnt go around planning a Mary Sue character for quite a while and then get mad about people trying to help them but here we are. You obviously werent prepared to receive negative criticism even though i wasnt rude to you, that isnt my fault. Im not going to hound you about it either, i dont care what you do.
cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
I didn't plan her to be a Sue character, and it was kind of rude. also, Victor, not Emily, is the main character.
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Thegirlwhoistsunade Featured By Owner May 22, 2015
Is this good  ; - ; I think she might be mary sue 

Fandom: Dragon Ball Z 

Name: Ikimono Hiro 

Nickname/Aliases: Hiro (What most call her), Shorty, Brat, Icky (By Vegata sometimes) Stranger, Boy, Girl, Kid, Dumb brat, dumb kid, Burden. 

Species: 1/2 Saiyan 

Gender: Female 

Age: 10 

Appearance: She usually has black short hair, but sometimes she'll go a while without cutting it and will braid it. Usually wearing a baggy, dark blue tank top with a black and red scarf. According to her, the scarf was once white, but after a freak accident, she got blood on it and decided to dye it black, but the red faded through. Usually wearing gray shorts or baggy gray pants. For shoes she usually wears none claiming: "I like the grass in between my toes... It makes me feel peaceful." But when she has to, she'll wear hiking boots. 


Backstory: Her mother was a saiyan, but her father was human. Her father was a very smart scientist, but extremely selfish, keeping his findings to himself. He discovered planted Vegeta through an extremely high-tech and advanced beyond the age telescope that he had developed. He saw that they had a very similar build to humans, so he developed a spacecraft that would get him there, although most didn't know how he managed, and he left for planet Vegeta. On arrival 5 years after departure, he was surrounded by Saiyans, all shooting Ki blasts at him. He nearly died, but Colifa, Hiro's mother (soon to be) had backed in and defended him. She was a saiyan doctor and scientist. She defended him claiming "He's different. Spare him, I want to do research." And she did as said, but let him live. Eventually, they fell in love and had Hiro. On the day before Freiza was going to destroy planet Vegeta, Colifa had a bad feeling and sent Hiro's father to return to Earth. He did as told, though unwilling, bringing Hiro with him. When they got back to Earth, with Hiro's saiyan nature, she lost control and hit and severely injured her father, but he survived. Once more, when she was 8, she lost control, this time, injuring her father much worse than last time. Reluctantly, he knocked her out. He removed all of her memories, but wrote her a note. "Hiro, I am sorry... So so sorry I had to do this to you, but it was for your own good. You're a saiyan... A half saiyan... Your mother's name is Colifa, and my name is Ge-" Her father's body was nowhere to be found when she woke. But she still thinks her father is a selfish jerk who did it for his own good. She was still very smart, and managed on her own in a small fort in the woods. She meets Gohan and the others when Vegeta and Nappa came to Earth. She fights Nappa after Tien dies, getting extremely mad, due to her fear of death and blood. She fights and does some moderate damage, but to no avale, getting knocked out because of fear and hesitation. 

Personality: She is selfish a bit, prideful, fearless (almost), and has no filter or sense of manners. She had no one to teach her, but no one's going to judge her to her face, they're to terrified. On multiple occasions she has beaten the legit crap-baskets out of people just because they said she was rude. She's not completely like that though. People said things behind her back, she heard, but usually let it slide. Because of that, her cold personality was what people saw and knew her as. She didn't show much sympathy until after Tien died by Nappa, that's when she lost control and attacked Nappa but then she had a memory of her father and froze and was knocked out. Piccolo and the others admired her for fighting for them, even though she didn't know them and that's when she became softer. When she woke up after Goku arrived and she was given a senzu bean, Goku asked "Your friends are waiting." He smiled, motioning to Gohan and Krillin. That's when she softened more. She had still never smiled at them, because she was more embarrassed then cold at that point. Eventually, during the Namek saga, on the ship to Namek, Krillin cracks a joke about Gohan's hair and she breaks out laughing (Unintentionally), revealing her true, bouncy nature. That's when she really opens up, though after that she put on a pout face and tried to act serious, though she once more broke out laughing with Gohan and Krillin. She usually keeps that personality, except in battle, when becoming more serious and focused, her cold personality once more returning. She's also a foodaholic and usually is found sitting in her room with music and a bunch of food if she's not training or off attempting to solve all the world's problems.

Aquamarique Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
its not like mary sue by "OH IM A PRINCESS SO PRITTY RITE". But it's a mary sue because of her traits. Mary sues can be the ugliest oc ever, or the best. The ugly ocs can make people care for them.
cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
I'm no professional, but i think it is a Mary Sue.
HotDigidyDemon Featured By Owner May 21, 2015
Is this good enough, if not tell me what I should change

Fandom: American Dragon (technically not a fandom)

Full Name: Ashley Draca

Nickname: Ash

Age: 14 (not my real age)

Species: Dragon (appears as a human and can transform into dragon form. That's basically what the dragons do in the show so it should make sense)

Height: (as human) 5'3 (as dragon) 7'1

Weight: 119 (as human) 250 (as dragon)
Well Sh!t

Fandom: Pokemon

Full name: Rosslyin Annabelle Summers

Nickname: "Ross"

Age: 100 

Species: Ninetails humanoid

Height: She has the ability to fluctuate but usually around 5'9

Weight: Also fluctuates depending on the form she takes, but about 150

Eyes: Amber (One's White because she's blind in it)
Clothing style: Just think of  Trainer May's outfit, but purple and without the the thing on her head

Hair: White/sliver

Current residence: She is a traveler, but somewhere around Pinwheel forest
Backstory (Ugh, Here we go): She Grew up around Mahogany town, She had abusive parents who often locked her in the basement and beat on her. when she was old enough ( Plotholes because she met up with me Aka the MC, when we were both 16. and my Fic stems from Pokemon Heartgold, in which it was around 2012-2015 and....Bleh I need to fix it.) We were both looking for a place to live, and after warming her up a little we set off on an adventure together. She also Accidentally Transformed her baby Brother into a Ghastly because he pulled on one of her tails, which earned her a severe beating, and that's how she became blind in one eye along with a large scar on her forehead. Also I came up with the idea that she got a forced gender change.

Personality: Sweet, Intelligent, Bold, Competitive,  (Also a little Shy), Protective, determined

Powers: She can manipulate fire, Pick up and throw things with psychic powers , She can run fast enough to climb up walls, abnormal strength, She can (If mad enough and transformed)  evaporate all water around her,  she is able to communicate with the dead (In a full meditative state.) she is able to alter her appearance, and finally she is able to sense malicious intent in peoples hearts and detect lies 5 times better than any human or machine. 

Weakness is: Obviously , her eye limits field of view and depth perception so aiming is a big issue, Is her scar is touched it makes her just tense right up and puts her in shock, when she transforms she becomes completely anamalistic, essentially throwing her logic and reason out the window, she hates to kill so in last resort situations she tends to hesitate. Also, She likes to run off a,lot.

Historical significance: N/a 

Yeah I think the thing that hurts her is the plotholes in her backstory, and as soon as a Bad past was supposedly a bad thing.....yeah XC but it helped kickstart events so is that okay? Also Ross is  Immortal but not really. she can die if her main tail is cut off, but otherwise she can't die. ( I kinda drew inspiration from the mythos too.)
Roke-the-Sorceress Featured By Owner Edited May 12, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Am I any good? Hehe
Fandom: Hetalia
Name: Ezuphas C. Valchekov
Nicknames: The Centipede Killer; Phassy
Age (country/human): 2739/24
Country: Roke (a fantasy island from A Wizard of Earthsea)
Height/weight: 5'8.5" / 124lbs
Species: Human I suppose
Eyes: Purple
Clothing style: roke-the-sorceress.deviantart.…
Current Residence: Thwil town, on the island of Roke
Backstory: A long career in sorcery, making few friends and few enemies due to her time-consuming obsession with the magical arts. Recently discovered how to operate warp doors, a way to travel between dimensions and create new ones. (Meets up with canon via the warp door between Earth and Earthsea)
Personality: Thoughtful, imaginative, a bit of a proud show-off, lonely, sensitive.
Powers: Sorcery/summoning/runeweaving/chanting/spellcasting/warpwriting/MAGIC of course~ what, do you think I went through all that practice and study to be modest sbout it?
Weaknesses: Low stamina, physically weak, can't be sick or out of sorts to cast spells safely
Historical Significance: Roke was the island where the famous SPARROWHAWK learned much of what he knew in the ways of magic. To this day, the school still stands, although it has been weathered away by time and refurbished several times.
ObsessiCat Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2015
The character herself seems fine...but how does she fit in a Hetalia Universe..? Its a historical comedy full of random crap but most of it is a metaphor for historical events or stereotypes, in my opinion she seems misplaced.
WolfyTheWolf11 Featured By Owner May 6, 2015
ExistentialOcto Featured By Owner May 2, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Name: Jonathan Lafferty
Age: 22
Nickname: Doesn't have one
Height/Weight: 5'11/144 lbs
Species: Human
Hair color/eye color: brown
Clothing style: Clean white shirt, sometimes a suit vest and smart trousers and shoes
Current residence: Lords' Quarter, Yharnam (This is a Bloodborne OC)
Back story: Lived in the Lords' Quarter his whole life. The scourge of beasts began long before he was born. Lives with his uncle in a large family mansion
Personality: Curious, cowardly, proud of his heritage
Powers: good with a rapier 
Weaknesses: can't fight under pressure, can't aim a gun to save his life, can't handle the sight of blood sometimes  
Historical significants: n/a

Any good? (his parents are dead but that is a really insignificant detail that doesn't really amount to much, it's just so that his uncle is the only family character I have to worry about writing)
T3kkno99 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2015
Just to let you know, I agree with what you said but some people have creativity and would prefer to make characters with unnatural hair color and eyes. Like me, I have my own characters that I made since 2013 and have been redesigning them. They're from my originality and they seem really good with different colors of hair and eyes because I personally think the natural colors are too boring. :/
Riassasin Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
This is really helpful good job!
SoundwaveFan175 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2015
When you said boyfriend is Megatron I just kinda died 
dauntlesscakeisbae Featured By Owner Edited Apr 7, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
Nickname: Lex
Age: 16
Height/Weight: 5'11/144 lbs
Species: Human
Hair color/eye color: Auburn/Hazel
Clothing style: Since she is in Dauntless, she wears a lot of black clothing and also a lot of leather
Current residence: Chicago, Illinois in the Dauntless faction
Back story: Grew up in Amity, and at the Choosing Ceremony, she chose Dauntless, leaving her mom, dad, and sister behind. She scored Divergent on her aptitude test with an aptitude for Dauntless and Amity
Personality: Curious, funny, brave, and kind
Powers: n/a
Weaknesses: She has a very bad problem with her temper at times and often asks too many questions
Historical significants: n/a
Is she good? :)
LunaKillerRainbow Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2015
there are a few things that could count as a little over board, but you did good.
LL-Sprinkle Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I loved it!
DoomSlayur Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2015  Student Digital Artist
If I make my oc human with dragon blood in him, would it be bad?

Note: he is supposed to be like the Dragonborn from Skyrim.
LunaKillerRainbow Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2015
that's completely fine in the world of Skyrim, but if it was a oc from like The Hunger Games, that wouldn't be right.
DoomSlayur Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2015  Student Digital Artist
K thx
BaegerBombbastic Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
TBH I'm writing my own fantasy/action novel and I'm just kind of concerned if mine is a mary sue or not. 

Name: Avery Jagare / Aiden Lovec (there is a reason for this) 
Age: 15-16 
Birthdate: July 14
Height: 5'3 (160 cm) 
Weight: 125 lb
Species: Freaque 
Hair color/style: Dark brown / About chin-mid neck length in the beginning, after she fakes her death, she's forced to cut all of it off. 
Eye color: [Faux: Green] [Natural: Black] (all Freaques and Supers and black eyes) 

Clothing style: For casual, usually invests in cardigans or jackets. Skinny jeans are her friend. Boots and converse are also her go-to. For SCOUTING, it's usually combat/steel toed boots with either yoga pants or leggings. She needs something to move around in, ya know? Scout members of Freaques are required to wear masks on their hunting expeditions unless they are undercover. She has this jacket her friends/team mates made for her that's like army green, and on it's back it has a badass explosion that her oldest friend painted on for her. That's basically her uniform. 

Current Residence: Condo in NYC. Scouting Hunters live in an apartment complex separated from the res of their race due to their dangerous career choice. 

Back Story: Not much is known about her parents. Though she is positive they are alive, she could really care less if they died tragically. They most likely lived in poverty when she was born, because they sold her to the Researchers lab to the race of Freaques. Since she was born a human, there were plenty of tests and fluids injected into her system. Apparently, someone injected a little too much for an infant to handle, but after a flu, she got over the illness quickly and he Researchers shooed her off into the race of Freaques, sending her to primary school until she was eleven years old. Since other schooling was optional, her and her friend Marcus went to join the military, and they were enrolled in the trainees regiment for two years. After her aptitude test near graduation, it scored her to be best fit to be placed in the Scouting Hunters. (They kill a SHIT ton of monsters, Supers, and humans!) She graduated at fourth in her class, and was able to choose and make up her own squad for combat. Usually, a team consists of 9 members, but she only picked 3. Marcus Krushnik, Dmitri Eland, and Christopher Orav. Now at age 15, she is an imperative part of the Special Operations Squad of the Scouting Hunters. Although her team has the least amount of members, they have the second largest amount of kills in the whole legion. 

Personality: She is pretty laid back and really down to earth, but she requires everyone to do their best and strives to get a job done correctly. Sarcastic, and has a humor darker than hell itself. Incredibly sadistic, since Scouts have to kill on an almost daily basis. Has an incredibly sharp wit, and is super clever. 
Powers: Nesis (telekinesis), Porting (Teleportation [are you catching on yet?]), Metal Manipulation. NORMAL POWERS: Martial arts/street fighting skills. Weaponry expertise. Painting and drawing. Baking. 
Weaknesses: Unable to use more than one power at a time. Heights (kinda) Has a habit of going too far with her victims. Sometimes doubts a little too much. Trust issues. Way too feisty at some points. Incredibly cunning. Sarcastic, and sadistic. UBER IMPATIENT. A super good liar. SO a liar. (LMAO) 
Historical significants: becomes superior at one point. might be important. (IT IS OMG) 

PLS someone tell me what their opinions are! I'm dying to know about her! 
ObsessiCat Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2015
Half her weaknesses are strengths, and i think none are really crippling as in: Over powered. What can defeat this girl?  She has waaayy to many abilities and seems to excel at every one. Why is her team allowed to be a special case of only three? Rules seem to bend for her.These are the Sue traits i see anyway.
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