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Guys, this journal is OLD. Please stop posting on it, as I won't reply.


Ok, I've been seeing really crappy OC's (original characters) floating around the place lately. I thought that I could help you guys out here.
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-What is a original character? It's a fan-made character someone usually makes for a book, show, game, etc that is used as a means to "interact" with the main characters of a book, show, game, etc. Unfortunately, some people get this wrong and their character/self-insert may become a Mary/Gary Sue.

-What is a Mary/Gary Sue? Well....they have the following traits:

-The plot of the book, show, game, etc goes THEIR way (If this only briefly mentions a canon character and is more oc-centric, it's usually ok)
-They have NO weaknesses
-Any and all characters are attracted to them
-They have a TRAGIC past
-They are a long lost relative or are the long lost lover/girlfriend/boyfriend to a character or more
-They die a TRAGIC death
-Every good guy and bad guy likes or loves them
-Immortal, can bring people back from the dead
-Is a vampire/werewolf/fairy/princess/dragon/prince/god/goddess/zombie/unicorn, etc OR all the above!
-Often have a very over-used name
-The canon characters are ooc (out of character)
-This list is too painful to write more, but I'm sure you get the idea.
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-Creating your character, Starting traits-

What is their name and/or nickname? If you name your character something like Sakura...go back to the name board! Also, do NOT match names with personalities!

Their age? Try not to make them YOUR age and birth date!

Height and Weight? If you don't describe these, often people will assume this is a self insert of YOU and may assume that you are VERY fat. So make this believable.

Species? Don't hybridize your favorite characters. Otherwise, they'll just end up a BLOB with eyes over here, a mouth over there, and twitching, useless limbs.

Hair color? PLEASE refrain from using a fake hair color (unnatural) or from making it the same hair color as your character's crush.

Eye color? Again, do NOT make it unnatural (like red)! ONLY make it unnatural if it's in a fantasy world. If it's oh...a world of cats, colors like yellow, gray, and (rarely) whitish are ok.

Clothing style? People won't take you seriously if you have them in ALL black or if they barely wear anything. If this is a animal (not a humanoid animal, but a ANIMAL animal), state if they're wearing something like a collar (avoid spiked/studded/chained collars).

Place they're living at? People won't take you seriously if you have your character in a place you want to live in. Like Japan.

Back story? Don't make it tragic unless it makes sense and doesn't go overboard. Also, if they have had any interaction with a canon character...Don't make them past lovers or some other junk like that!

Personality? Avoid matching this with names. Seriously.

Powers? Under NO circumstances should you make them immortal, have unmatched powers, ultimate healing skills, etc.. Make it a skill that they've been working with. Like uh....the ability to balance plates on a stick.

Weaknesses? This is very important!

Historic significants? If your character is something like a country representative or a solider, please do your research!

Remember, you should not make them look like a canon character! That's like dying Sonic green and calling it your OC!
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OC examples- This will show you good and bad examples of OCs.

Good example-
Name: Anna Herring
Nickname: Ms. Fish
Age: 24
Height/Weight: 5'3"/230 lbs
Species: Human
Hair color/eye color: Auburn/Hazel
Clothing style: Casual and modest
Current residence: Houston, Texas
Back story: Grew up in a small town and went to collage. Her family lives in Austin. She has three siblings: two brothers, and a sister (Names are: Fred, James, and Sarah). Anna works at a veterinary clinic.
Personality: Very curious and bold
Powers: n/a
Weaknesses: She has a really bad cavity and has bad year-round allergies to the pollen.
Historical significants: n/a

Bad example-
Name: Katsumi (Victorious beauty) Yuzuki (Gentle moon)
Nickname: Sexy goddess
Age: (1,5)32,783,278,937,284 (if it's a "immortal" age and has anything from 1,1 to 1,6...you're basically hiding YOUR age)
Height/Weight: 6'2"/ 90 lbs
Species: Human with hints of elf, vampire, and dragon.
Hair color/eye color: Pink/Yellow
Clothing style: Sexy and cute clothes
Current residence: Japan, baby! Yeah!
Back story: All her parents DIED! She's BFF's with Naruto, Ichigo, and Sonic. Her boyfriend is Megatron. She's married to Gary Oak! It's ok though because everyone likes her and even fights for her LOVE!
Personality: Cute, innocent, flirty
Powers: She's immortal. She's got like the ability to speak to animals! She can run really fast and fly. Oh yeah! She can breath fire and if someone dies, she can bring them back!
Weaknesses: What weaknesses?
Historical significants: She's the reason (insert war here) started but she stopped it ALL by herself!


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There you go. I hope this guide has helped!
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melovedogs123 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
With MLP OCs, I guess unicorns are OK.
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Otakunerdbeast Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Umm...Is it that bad for an OC to have a tragic past? (No hate, I'm just wondering.)
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Strexcorpinc Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2015  New Deviant
I'm half Japanese, so when people either claim to 'know' Japanese (Ex: Konnichiwa, sayonara, kistune) or say that THEY'D LOOOOVVVVE to live in Japan, it gets on my nerves a lot. But how does this sound:

Name: Copper
Nickname: Cop
Age: 3 years old
Height and weight: 3 feet (at the shoulder) and weight is 80 pounds
Species: Wolf; Gray wolf, Northern American specimen
Fur color: Reddish gray, with hints of white
Clothing style: ...? 
Backstory: Born in Yellowstone, her pack, the Druids, was pushed out of Lamar Valley (actually happened) and assisted the pack in winning back the land. 
Personality: Clever, can be rude when POed.
Powers: She's a wolf. 
Weaknesses: Well, when her nerves get damaged she feels pain... but she can drive happy people away, she really isn't a happy person.
Fact: When she was a pup, she got bitten by a rattlesnake, but healed. 
Historical signifigance: Nothing really. 
Fandom: Real life oc?
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Aquamarique Featured By Owner Edited Jun 18, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Artist
Name: Translucy
Nickname: Transparent ghost or Lucy
Age: 14 and a 1/2
Height/weight: Average pony height/ 128lbs
Breed: Pegasus
Current Residence: Cloudsdale
Species: Ghost Pony
Hair color/eye color: Blue/green
Clothing style: Whatever's comfy, or none at all.(She is a pony, she doesn't wear clothes a lot XD)
Backstory: She was born on clouds and was given the power to fly, she is a pegasus and likes to make friends, and is the only child.
Personality: Boring, intellegent, and likes to sleep.
Powers: Regular pegasus powers
Weakness: Weaknesses of a human, lava, fire, drowning, and holding her breath.
Fact: Even if she is a ghost, she can't walk through things.
Historical significants: n/a
Fandom: MLP: FiM

I made her name translucy because she is a ghost and is translucent, but cannot walk through things.
So, is she a mary sue? She's a pony btw, so I think it's normal for a pony to have these unnatural things.
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cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Artist
What if you, like me, are making a Tim burton oc?
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cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Artist
if it's okay here's my character:
Name: Amber Booth
Nickname: none
Age: this is Corpse Bride, so she died at 24, born in 1991(Sagitarrius I can't spell it)
Height: the same as any tim burton female
Weight: see above
Species: Human (now a corpse)
Hair/Eyes: Blue(was brown. Again, Corpse Bride)/Black
Clothing style:Torn tan dress
Current Residence: Downstairs
Backstory:She's Emily's older sister by 5 years. They came from a rich family. She fell in love with a guy she met as a kid. So did he. One night, as the two were getting married, she was poisoned, and sent to Downstairs. Now, years have passed and she doesn't recognize the killer (aka Barkis), and he doesn't really care.
Personality:She's funny, occasionally flirty, but she can't pay attention for very long.
powers: does being undead count?
Weaknesses: see backstory
Historical significance: none
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ObsessiCat Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2015
*nosey nosey* Just my two cents, She sounds almost exactly like the main character of the canon, this is a sign of a sue :/ Try to re create her backstory also making her a relative of a canon character is usually ill received. 
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cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Artist
I'm sorry. I tried my best not to make her a Mary Sue character. And this came from my mind, so shut up.
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ObsessiCat Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2015
Im sorry i didnt mean to be rude I was trying to help. My opinion stands, but by offering it I assure you I meant no disrespect.
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cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Artist
Okay, thanks for clarifying. But you still shouldn't go around telling people that the characters they've been planning for quite a while a Mary/Gary Sues. *hint hint*
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ObsessiCat Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2015
People shouldnt go around planning a Mary Sue character for quite a while and then get mad about people trying to help them but here we are. You obviously werent prepared to receive negative criticism even though i wasnt rude to you, that isnt my fault. Im not going to hound you about it either, i dont care what you do.
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cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Artist
I didn't plan her to be a Sue character, and it was kind of rude. also, Victor, not Emily, is the main character.
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Thegirlwhoistsunade Featured By Owner May 22, 2015
Is this good  ; - ; I think she might be mary sue 


Fandom: Dragon Ball Z 

Name: Ikimono Hiro 

Nickname/Aliases: Hiro (What most call her), Shorty, Brat, Icky (By Vegata sometimes) Stranger, Boy, Girl, Kid, Dumb brat, dumb kid, Burden. 

Species: 1/2 Saiyan 

Gender: Female 

Age: 10 

Appearance: She usually has black short hair, but sometimes she'll go a while without cutting it and will braid it. Usually wearing a baggy, dark blue tank top with a black and red scarf. According to her, the scarf was once white, but after a freak accident, she got blood on it and decided to dye it black, but the red faded through. Usually wearing gray shorts or baggy gray pants. For shoes she usually wears none claiming: "I like the grass in between my toes... It makes me feel peaceful." But when she has to, she'll wear hiking boots. 

 

Backstory: Her mother was a saiyan, but her father was human. Her father was a very smart scientist, but extremely selfish, keeping his findings to himself. He discovered planted Vegeta through an extremely high-tech and advanced beyond the age telescope that he had developed. He saw that they had a very similar build to humans, so he developed a spacecraft that would get him there, although most didn't know how he managed, and he left for planet Vegeta. On arrival 5 years after departure, he was surrounded by Saiyans, all shooting Ki blasts at him. He nearly died, but Colifa, Hiro's mother (soon to be) had backed in and defended him. She was a saiyan doctor and scientist. She defended him claiming "He's different. Spare him, I want to do research." And she did as said, but let him live. Eventually, they fell in love and had Hiro. On the day before Freiza was going to destroy planet Vegeta, Colifa had a bad feeling and sent Hiro's father to return to Earth. He did as told, though unwilling, bringing Hiro with him. When they got back to Earth, with Hiro's saiyan nature, she lost control and hit and severely injured her father, but he survived. Once more, when she was 8, she lost control, this time, injuring her father much worse than last time. Reluctantly, he knocked her out. He removed all of her memories, but wrote her a note. "Hiro, I am sorry... So so sorry I had to do this to you, but it was for your own good. You're a saiyan... A half saiyan... Your mother's name is Colifa, and my name is Ge-" Her father's body was nowhere to be found when she woke. But she still thinks her father is a selfish jerk who did it for his own good. She was still very smart, and managed on her own in a small fort in the woods. She meets Gohan and the others when Vegeta and Nappa came to Earth. She fights Nappa after Tien dies, getting extremely mad, due to her fear of death and blood. She fights and does some moderate damage, but to no avale, getting knocked out because of fear and hesitation. 

Personality: She is selfish a bit, prideful, fearless (almost), and has no filter or sense of manners. She had no one to teach her, but no one's going to judge her to her face, they're to terrified. On multiple occasions she has beaten the legit crap-baskets out of people just because they said she was rude. She's not completely like that though. People said things behind her back, she heard, but usually let it slide. Because of that, her cold personality was what people saw and knew her as. She didn't show much sympathy until after Tien died by Nappa, that's when she lost control and attacked Nappa but then she had a memory of her father and froze and was knocked out. Piccolo and the others admired her for fighting for them, even though she didn't know them and that's when she became softer. When she woke up after Goku arrived and she was given a senzu bean, Goku asked "Your friends are waiting." He smiled, motioning to Gohan and Krillin. That's when she softened more. She had still never smiled at them, because she was more embarrassed then cold at that point. Eventually, during the Namek saga, on the ship to Namek, Krillin cracks a joke about Gohan's hair and she breaks out laughing (Unintentionally), revealing her true, bouncy nature. That's when she really opens up, though after that she put on a pout face and tried to act serious, though she once more broke out laughing with Gohan and Krillin. She usually keeps that personality, except in battle, when becoming more serious and focused, her cold personality once more returning. She's also a foodaholic and usually is found sitting in her room with music and a bunch of food if she's not training or off attempting to solve all the world's problems.

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Aquamarique Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Artist
its not like mary sue by "OH IM A PRINCESS SO PRITTY RITE". But it's a mary sue because of her traits. Mary sues can be the ugliest oc ever, or the best. The ugly ocs can make people care for them.
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cutiepie185 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Artist
I'm no professional, but i think it is a Mary Sue.
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HotDigidyDemon Featured By Owner May 21, 2015
Is this good enough, if not tell me what I should change

Fandom: American Dragon (technically not a fandom)

Full Name: Ashley Draca

Nickname: Ash

Age: 14 (not my real age)

Species: Dragon (appears as a human and can transform into dragon form. That's basically what the dragons do in the show so it should make sense)

Height: (as human) 5'3 (as dragon) 7'1

Weight: 119 (as human) 250 (as dragon)
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Well Sh!t

Fandom: Pokemon

Full name: Rosslyin Annabelle Summers

Nickname: "Ross"

Age: 100 

Species: Ninetails humanoid

Height: She has the ability to fluctuate but usually around 5'9

Weight: Also fluctuates depending on the form she takes, but about 150

Eyes: Amber (One's White because she's blind in it)
Clothing style: Just think of  Trainer May's outfit, but purple and without the the thing on her head

Hair: White/sliver

Current residence: She is a traveler, but somewhere around Pinwheel forest
Backstory (Ugh, Here we go): She Grew up around Mahogany town, She had abusive parents who often locked her in the basement and beat on her. when she was old enough ( Plotholes because she met up with me Aka the MC, when we were both 16. and my Fic stems from Pokemon Heartgold, in which it was around 2012-2015 and....Bleh I need to fix it.) We were both looking for a place to live, and after warming her up a little we set off on an adventure together. She also Accidentally Transformed her baby Brother into a Ghastly because he pulled on one of her tails, which earned her a severe beating, and that's how she became blind in one eye along with a large scar on her forehead. Also I came up with the idea that she got a forced gender change.

Personality: Sweet, Intelligent, Bold, Competitive,  (Also a little Shy), Protective, determined

Powers: She can manipulate fire, Pick up and throw things with psychic powers , She can run fast enough to climb up walls, abnormal strength, She can (If mad enough and transformed)  evaporate all water around her,  she is able to communicate with the dead (In a full meditative state.) she is able to alter her appearance, and finally she is able to sense malicious intent in peoples hearts and detect lies 5 times better than any human or machine. 

Weakness is: Obviously , her eye limits field of view and depth perception so aiming is a big issue, Is her scar is touched it makes her just tense right up and puts her in shock, when she transforms she becomes completely anamalistic, essentially throwing her logic and reason out the window, she hates to kill so in last resort situations she tends to hesitate. Also, She likes to run off a,lot.

Historical significance: N/a 


Yeah I think the thing that hurts her is the plotholes in her backstory, and as soon as a Bad past was supposedly a bad thing.....yeah XC but it helped kickstart events so is that okay? Also Ross is  Immortal but not really. she can die if her main tail is cut off, but otherwise she can't die. ( I kinda drew inspiration from the mythos too.)
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Roke-the-Sorceress Featured By Owner Edited May 12, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Am I any good? Hehe
Fandom: Hetalia
Name: Ezuphas C. Valchekov
Nicknames: The Centipede Killer; Phassy
Age (country/human): 2739/24
Country: Roke (a fantasy island from A Wizard of Earthsea)
Height/weight: 5'8.5" / 124lbs
Species: Human I suppose
Eyes: Purple
Clothing style: roke-the-sorceress.deviantart.…
Current Residence: Thwil town, on the island of Roke
Backstory: A long career in sorcery, making few friends and few enemies due to her time-consuming obsession with the magical arts. Recently discovered how to operate warp doors, a way to travel between dimensions and create new ones. (Meets up with canon via the warp door between Earth and Earthsea)
Personality: Thoughtful, imaginative, a bit of a proud show-off, lonely, sensitive.
Powers: Sorcery/summoning/runeweaving/chanting/spellcasting/warpwriting/MAGIC of course~ what, do you think I went through all that practice and study to be modest sbout it?
Weaknesses: Low stamina, physically weak, can't be sick or out of sorts to cast spells safely
Historical Significance: Roke was the island where the famous SPARROWHAWK learned much of what he knew in the ways of magic. To this day, the school still stands, although it has been weathered away by time and refurbished several times.
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ObsessiCat Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2015
The character herself seems fine...but how does she fit in a Hetalia Universe..? Its a historical comedy full of random crap but most of it is a metaphor for historical events or stereotypes, in my opinion she seems misplaced.
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WolfyTheWolf11 Featured By Owner May 6, 2015
OMG THAT BAD EXA MADE ME DIEEE! XDDD DIENGG
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ExistentialOcto Featured By Owner May 2, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Name: Jonathan Lafferty
Age: 22
Nickname: Doesn't have one
Height/Weight: 5'11/144 lbs
Species: Human
Hair color/eye color: brown
Clothing style: Clean white shirt, sometimes a suit vest and smart trousers and shoes
Current residence: Lords' Quarter, Yharnam (This is a Bloodborne OC)
Back story: Lived in the Lords' Quarter his whole life. The scourge of beasts began long before he was born. Lives with his uncle in a large family mansion
Personality: Curious, cowardly, proud of his heritage
Powers: good with a rapier 
Weaknesses: can't fight under pressure, can't aim a gun to save his life, can't handle the sight of blood sometimes  
Historical significants: n/a

Any good? (his parents are dead but that is a really insignificant detail that doesn't really amount to much, it's just so that his uncle is the only family character I have to worry about writing)
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T3kkno99 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2015
Just to let you know, I agree with what you said but some people have creativity and would prefer to make characters with unnatural hair color and eyes. Like me, I have my own characters that I made since 2013 and have been redesigning them. They're from my originality and they seem really good with different colors of hair and eyes because I personally think the natural colors are too boring. :/
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Riassasin Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
This is really helpful good job!
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SoundwaveFan175 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2015
When you said boyfriend is Megatron I just kinda died 
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dauntlesscakeisbae Featured By Owner Edited Apr 7, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
Nickname: Lex
Age: 16
Height/Weight: 5'11/144 lbs
Species: Human
Hair color/eye color: Auburn/Hazel
Clothing style: Since she is in Dauntless, she wears a lot of black clothing and also a lot of leather
Current residence: Chicago, Illinois in the Dauntless faction
Back story: Grew up in Amity, and at the Choosing Ceremony, she chose Dauntless, leaving her mom, dad, and sister behind. She scored Divergent on her aptitude test with an aptitude for Dauntless and Amity
Personality: Curious, funny, brave, and kind
Powers: n/a
Weaknesses: She has a very bad problem with her temper at times and often asks too many questions
Historical significants: n/a
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Is she good? :)
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LunaKillerRainbow Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2015
there are a few things that could count as a little over board, but you did good.
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LL-Sprinkle Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I loved it!
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DoomSlayur Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2015  Student Digital Artist
If I make my oc human with dragon blood in him, would it be bad?

Note: he is supposed to be like the Dragonborn from Skyrim.
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LunaKillerRainbow Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2015
that's completely fine in the world of Skyrim, but if it was a oc from like The Hunger Games, that wouldn't be right.
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DoomSlayur Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2015  Student Digital Artist
K thx
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BaegerBombbastic Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
TBH I'm writing my own fantasy/action novel and I'm just kind of concerned if mine is a mary sue or not. 

Name: Avery Jagare / Aiden Lovec (there is a reason for this) 
Age: 15-16 
Birthdate: July 14
Height: 5'3 (160 cm) 
Weight: 125 lb
Species: Freaque 
Hair color/style: Dark brown / About chin-mid neck length in the beginning, after she fakes her death, she's forced to cut all of it off. 
Eye color: [Faux: Green] [Natural: Black] (all Freaques and Supers and black eyes) 

Clothing style: For casual, usually invests in cardigans or jackets. Skinny jeans are her friend. Boots and converse are also her go-to. For SCOUTING, it's usually combat/steel toed boots with either yoga pants or leggings. She needs something to move around in, ya know? Scout members of Freaques are required to wear masks on their hunting expeditions unless they are undercover. She has this jacket her friends/team mates made for her that's like army green, and on it's back it has a badass explosion that her oldest friend painted on for her. That's basically her uniform. 

Current Residence: Condo in NYC. Scouting Hunters live in an apartment complex separated from the res of their race due to their dangerous career choice. 

Back Story: Not much is known about her parents. Though she is positive they are alive, she could really care less if they died tragically. They most likely lived in poverty when she was born, because they sold her to the Researchers lab to the race of Freaques. Since she was born a human, there were plenty of tests and fluids injected into her system. Apparently, someone injected a little too much for an infant to handle, but after a flu, she got over the illness quickly and he Researchers shooed her off into the race of Freaques, sending her to primary school until she was eleven years old. Since other schooling was optional, her and her friend Marcus went to join the military, and they were enrolled in the trainees regiment for two years. After her aptitude test near graduation, it scored her to be best fit to be placed in the Scouting Hunters. (They kill a SHIT ton of monsters, Supers, and humans!) She graduated at fourth in her class, and was able to choose and make up her own squad for combat. Usually, a team consists of 9 members, but she only picked 3. Marcus Krushnik, Dmitri Eland, and Christopher Orav. Now at age 15, she is an imperative part of the Special Operations Squad of the Scouting Hunters. Although her team has the least amount of members, they have the second largest amount of kills in the whole legion. 

Personality: She is pretty laid back and really down to earth, but she requires everyone to do their best and strives to get a job done correctly. Sarcastic, and has a humor darker than hell itself. Incredibly sadistic, since Scouts have to kill on an almost daily basis. Has an incredibly sharp wit, and is super clever. 
Powers: Nesis (telekinesis), Porting (Teleportation [are you catching on yet?]), Metal Manipulation. NORMAL POWERS: Martial arts/street fighting skills. Weaponry expertise. Painting and drawing. Baking. 
Weaknesses: Unable to use more than one power at a time. Heights (kinda) Has a habit of going too far with her victims. Sometimes doubts a little too much. Trust issues. Way too feisty at some points. Incredibly cunning. Sarcastic, and sadistic. UBER IMPATIENT. A super good liar. SO a liar. (LMAO) 
Historical significants: becomes superior at one point. might be important. (IT IS OMG) 

PLS someone tell me what their opinions are! I'm dying to know about her! 
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ObsessiCat Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2015
Half her weaknesses are strengths, and i think none are really crippling as in: Over powered. What can defeat this girl?  She has waaayy to many abilities and seems to excel at every one. Why is her team allowed to be a special case of only three? Rules seem to bend for her.These are the Sue traits i see anyway.
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DanielsMyMiddleName Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Name: Pei Gwan
Age: 22,820 Earth Years (35 Their Years)
(Their age - Human age: 652-1)
Birth Date: June 9
Height: 5 feet
Weight: 158 lb
Species: Kutonian
Haircolor: Fading Grey
Eye color: Lavander/Purple
Clothing Style: Casual: T-shirt, plad button-up shirt half way buttoned up over it, shirt
has paint on it and sleeves are rolled up to her elbows, she has a (literally) sloppy pun as her
hair style, and sometimes uses a barrete to pin a strand of hair out of her face. She also has a backpack usually filled
with hygenic items.
Place they'e living at: She lived with a human couple she encountered while she first landed on
earth.
Back Story: She was just a simple Kutonian with a job of finding out what Earth was like, she
went to Earth, and unlike most of the clumsy aliens, she DIDN'T CRASH LAND. Her ship is a
one seater that can transform into a motercycle when needed. (I wanted to do a bike, but... How would that
work? The engine and stuff needs a place to go!) She first met a couple of a thin blonde woman named Margret,
and a thick tan man named Gregory. At first, the couple didn't trust her one big, and were actually planning to
turn her into the goverment, but after she proved that she wasn't there to take over, or anything crazy that most
aliens seem to do, they decided to take her in. After a month of living there she got a job at a coffee shop (NOT STARBUCKS. Haha.)
and now enjoys painting, sculpting, and other craft projects. (Expect for wood work and melding. She's terrible at that!)
She doesn't really do anything special, or have a crazy back story. She's just an adverage joe.
Personality: She's usually sweet, but can get moody sometimes. She can get carried away with talking about plants, such as flowers or vegetables,
but doesn't talk much since she can't speak Enlgish well, but she's studied it and her grammer is as good as an educated 9TH graders. (She's only been on
Earth for about 8-9 years. She's kind of a quick learner.) Usually when she's upset, she doesn't show it, and she's VERY protective of Margret and Greogory.
Powers: She can mimic the look of other creatures, but barely uses it. She also heals twice as quickly as a human, but gets infected if it's not washed daily.
Weakenesses: Babies (a fear of them since they're germy little demons), she greatly dislikes dust and dirty things (like a dirty covered floor, dusty tv screen) and
pickled or steamed foods (she gets extremely sick).


How about this? xD
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elefiore Featured By Owner Edited Feb 26, 2015
How is mine? He's in a fantasy novel I'm trying to write

Name - Rufio (I didn't really think of a surname)
Nickname -  n/a
Age - 23 

Height/Weight - around 6 ft/
Species - Half Vahirden (race made by me: usually have black/silver hair, black or gray eyes and pale skin) and half elf (LOTR-like)
Hair color/eye color - Black with a dark red strand/Light ice blue
Clothing style - light armor, leather, cotton or (more generally) natural materials, often dark
Current residence - Relenia (it's kind of a camp-town of people that don't want to fight in the war between races, it's kept hidden with magic)
Back story - He never met his parents and the "leader" (?) of the realm adopted him and got him trained by masters in his army, to make him a perfect-trained soldier. At war, his only friend dies, so he suddenly becomes really introverted, emotionless and rebellious. He escapes to the forest and lives there for some time, learning natural magic from Nymphs, then some of the soldiers that fought with him find him and all together, after gaining his trust, they found Relenia and start to live there peacefully with also prople of other races with their same way of thinking.
Personality - At first: comprehensive, rational, sensitive and a bit hot-headed. Later: really introverted, cynical (except he shows mercy sometimes), rebellious and calm (looking). Sometimes (rarely, anyway) he lets others see his fragile side.
Powers - He's expecially good with magic, "stealth" and throwing knives (and quite good with one-handed swords)
Weaknesses - 1. When he sees blood (like other Vahirdens) he goes berserk and becomes way too impulsive, has improved refletions and finds it difficult to distinguish between friends and enemies; 2. He doesn't care at all of hurting people's feelings; 3. He's not really good with expressing his feelings (*ahem* when and if he has any); 4. Sometimes, very rarely, he lets others see his fragile side: he gets depressed and (yes, he does) cries, or he gets too angry and punches something until he's calm again.
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SpeedySonica Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2015  Student Artist
Mine is in fantasy world...so they have some unnatural hairs and magic pets

Name: Sonica Hayaine
Nickname: Ribbon Girl or Sonka
Age: 15 
Height: Short (I can't say how short because I don't even think of it...juts immagine how short is Taiga Aisaka...)
Species: Human
Hair/Eye: Dodger blue,Green(right dark left lime)
Clothing: Skirts with leggings,clothes with long sleeves (colors: blue but sometimes depend of the color)
Personality: Calm,serious,out of earth,curious,loyal with friends and shy
Weakness: usually can't understand fastly,afraid of high and..well..spiders...ice-cream,things that make her curious,can sometimes get easily distracted
Powers: Can draw and make it alive but with time limit (30 sec or 1 min)
Back Story: She live in Haru Hana Village with her parents and she have a younger sister,Lea,and their flying bunny Kirimo but then they tranfered in AkiYami Town for her mom and dad's works problems
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Loyalshadows Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2015  Student Artist
This helped A LOT!
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TheHokum Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2015
how is mine?

Name: Johanna James
Nickname: Jojo, Ginger, Redhead
Age: 18
Height: 4'11/96lbs
Species: Human
Hair Colour/Eye Colour: Ginger, blue eyes
Clothing: gothic chic, latest trend
Current Residence: Park Slope, New York
Backstory: Lived with her mother Madison James and her husband until she turned 16. She wanted to be emancipated after having what she called the last fight with her step father about what she wanted to go to college for.
Personality: Snarky, Sarcastic, Introverted and Serious
Powers: n/a
Weaknesses: Sinus problems, anger management issues, really "touchy" when it comes to someone doubting her
historical significants: n/a
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CelestialWolf66 Featured By Owner Edited Jan 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Ok, so I'm leaning in and out of this idea I have for my character so I want to know if it comes out mary-sue-ish:

Aurora (my character) is the daughter of Glacia, the head of their clan, and Glacia wants Aurora to accept immortality when she reaches master status (a rare thing to happen) and becomes the prophesied Dragon Guardian (the name is still changing). But Aurora doesn't want to be immortal because she has a fear of leaving her friends behind. Story goes on and in order to save the world/land, she has to become the thing she doesn't want, immortal. She does so but has to stay in the temple (as a spirit) to protect the land, and as she watches the world change she watch over her friends until the day she is needed again.

You see, my definition of immortality is becoming a spirit (or something like that) and I want to know if that feature is counted as mary-sue-ish? If you don't mind answering.
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rainbowwolf3 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2014  Student General Artist
I really found his really helpful! Though I'm still having trouble making my character less marysuesh.
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KawaiiJoltic Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Okay, this is a pretty good guide. Just for fun, I thought it would be funny to ask you to review some Pokémon OCs I made a long time ago, before I knew what a Mary Sue was. I know they're REALLY bad, so I just thought they'd be nice for laughs. 

Name: Natasha Acamine 
Nickname: Nat
Age: 11
Height/Weight: Pretty short and slight
Species: Human
Hair color/eye color: Light brown hair, leaf green eyes
Clothing style: Dresses like Leaf, but with a yellow scarf
Current residence: Twinleaf Town, but has an underground secret base 
Back story: A childhood friend of Dawn and Barry, the latter of which she has a crush on. Her mother is a Pokemon researcher and former contest champion who is very wealthy, she had a Jigglypuff, Trapinch, Torchic, Duskull, and Bulbasaur before she started her journey. Made friends with Ash, Paul, and Zoey, the latter of which she travelled with on her journey alongside Barry. Went after both Contests and Gyms, which even though she has a canon objection to this, Zoey didn't frown upon. 
Personality: Kind and soft spoken, nice to nearly everyone. 
Powers: A bit of empathic powers. 
Weaknesses: Tends to get very upset when something happens to someone she cares about; fell into deep depression when her Porygon was kidnapped, tends to underestimate her own abilities. 
Historical significants: Helps save the world a few times alongside Ash. 

And here we have the REALLY bad one. Feel free to laugh. 
Name: Katana Veon
Nickname: Kat
Age: 14
Height/Weight: Tall, lithe
Species: Human
Hair color/eye color: Brown hair in a style rather similar to Usagi's from Sailor Moon, orange eyes that look like fire with red and yellow towards the top and bottom, respectively. 
Clothing style: Burgundy ninja uniform, a hat that looks like the Pokemon Center attendants, but burgundy and with a ninja star symbol rather than a cross. 
Current residence: Pallet Town
Back story: Childhood friend of Ash's, (she might have had a crush on him) hates Gary with a burning passion due to him bullying her as a child. Her parents were both ninjas, so she trained as one as well. Rather skilled at many forms of combat, Pokemon training included. 
Personality: Sweet when not on ninja duty, fierce and cold when in uniform. 
Powers: Ninjitsu
Weaknesses: So cold at times that people don't recognize her or like her. (Yeah, I was younger, okay?)
Historical significants: Helps Ash out a few times, travels with him for a while

I'm really sorry. Looking back, I can't believe I was really such a Suethor, though I never got around to publishing any of this, thank God. 
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SHSLMuffin Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
o m f g
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KawaiiJoltic Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I know. Terrible. Truly loathesome. 
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KatenKyoytsu Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2014
I saw your page on making an OC and I wanted to see if I'm going in the right direction
Manga: Pandora Hearts
Name:, Diasake Baskerville
He's well dressed, skinny, black hair with natural white highlights.
Nickname: Scars
Because his whole back is covered with them.
Age: Physical: 21 Real:121
Height/Height: 6ft 3inch, 170 lbs, skinny on the lean side
Hair color/Eye color: Black with natural white highlights, black with a few sparkles of red.
Species: Baskerville
Past: Before he was a Baskerville he was subjected to very horrific experiences (all Baskervilles are) alongside his childhood friend, Charlotte who is also a Baskerville. Many people don't like him and he will hurt anyone who hurts his family, his fellow Baskervilles.
Personality: Aloof, cold, stern, patient
Powers: Has a contract with the Chain Gryphon who is one of the 5 Black Winged Chains but is not the strongest. Trying to think of an original power, need some help with that.
Weaknesses: Family, over thinking, always struggling with what is right and wrong
What do you think can be improved?
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Teleway Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2014
Forgive me, I don't know the manga, so I can't judge this oc properly.
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shimmerwolfgirl Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2014  Student Artist
the 1st example was so realistic
the 2nd was.................stuff


im more of a fantasy person so only some don't count 4 me >w<

(wuts a canon???) 
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Teleway Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2014
Canon basically (in literature) "is the material accepted as part of the story in an individual fictional universe" So anything the creator of the book, manga, comic, etc says has happened, is accepted.

So some examples would be: -In My Little Pony, it's canon that Twilight is Princess Celestia's student.
- In Dragon Ball Z, it's canon that Goku and Chichi are married, and Vegeta and Bulma are married.
- In the book series (about cats) Warriors, it's canon that Rusty is accepted into Thunderclan.

What wouldn't be canon: -Pinkie pie is instead Celestia's student.
-Goku and Vegeta ditch their wives and children to be together.
-Rusty gets accepted into Shadowclan instead.                     
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shimmerwolfgirl Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2014  Student Artist
ohhh
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EveFTW Featured By Owner Edited Dec 5, 2014
Uhh... So I made an oc....
Well, it's a work in progress, so yeah...
It's also from an anime, so if something sounds weird, it's probably following the plot of the story.
Name: Di (Short for Diana, but Di sounds cool)
Age: 16
Height: 5'7 (Is that too tall?
Weight: (I'm not sure what the average height for a girl that's 5'7 is...)
Species: Human
Hair color: White (It's normal, because my OC is from this anime where there's this place where white hair is natural, so it's not too weird. I hope.)
Eye color: CHANGES COLORS!!!11 (Jk, blue xD)
Personality: Serious but not like too serious, friendly, a bit introverted, sometimes greedy, especially when there is something that evolves money.
Weaknesses: She has a lot of pride, and that gets to her head. She is also deadly afraid of fire, death in general, and loosing her friends.
Powers: Pssh. She doesn't have any.
Clothing Style: The typical outfits that they wear in the shows. So yeah, the normal stuff.
Backstory: (I tried to tone down the Mary Sue-ness for this. Also, like I said earlier, this is my oc for an anime, so if something sounds weird, sorry) Di was born as a servant for royalty. She became friends with a servant there, leading her to meet the heir to the throne as a child. Then, many years later, to escape from the evil queen, the three of them escape via aircrafts to meet the main characters and a bunch of stuff happens.
....So, how bad is it? It's my first oc and all, so....
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Teleway Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2014
This sounds good~
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EveFTW Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2014
Thank you! :D
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